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Laying upon the blackened night
Something here just ain't right
No stars in the sky
No dirt beneath my hands
Just no room for me to stand

As I try to lift my soul
Paralyzed, I just can't go
What is this weight upon my chest?
Is it me trying my best?

I can't seem to find the moon
My time has come way to soon
I feel now
Where I am
Fading now is all I can

So as I lay here in my grave
Buried deep, cannot be saved
I reach upon for my last breath
The day is here, this hour.....death
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PrincesaSN95 Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Student Writer
Oh my.....such deep me ain't and so dark but awesome! Jordan ur such a good writer miiiiiiiiiilllleeeesss more better than me xxx I need to steal ur brain ;) 
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Phatbear1400 Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Not better, I just write different, it's like looking at Edgar Alan Poe's writings and Shakespeare, the writing is different but both are equally beautiful poets.
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PrincesaSN95 Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Student Writer
OMG they are amazing poets but seriously ur work is beautiful. I am honestly saying it's just amazing xxx 
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Phatbear1400 Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I write the way I feel, that's all, but thanks for the honesty, it's greatly appreciated.
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PrincesaSN95 Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Student Writer
Awww ur most welcome :) 
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